frantz

nice! but it isnt finished, is it? there is some sections too much empty for a concert. like as between the bars 28 and 36 - too much waste space, the oboe could perform a fine solo here before returning to the tutti.

another annoying thing is the strict attachement of the soloist's singing to the general rhythm, i think that a soloist should free himself here and there from the bonds of the group, with counter-rhythms, ornamentations and contrasting phrasing ando so on, that creates intersting and dynamic contrasts which adds interest to the whole. and even when there is solo passages the main rhythmical/melodic motive returns again and again with minimal variations, and i feel that a bit boring and too much predictable. besides, this same motive extended to the whole orchestra somewhat breaks the flowing of the discourse, because there is a highly marked pause in it which draws great attention. in the other hand this same motive can allow for you to elaborate very appealing dialogues and counterpoints between the voices, making use of that very pause and marked rhythm to make echo effects through the whole ensemble.