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Okay, the music here is really good, I like it. So I'm mostly going to critique the non-musical "iffies".
Measure 57, 2nd Violins: Why do you have an 8va symbol there? Just get rid of it, the music doesn't even go above the stave. Same at measure 66. Just lose the 8va and transpose the line up an octave.
Measure 62, Horns: Holy CRAP this is so way extremely too much high. Yes, you read me right. I often don't make sense. But neither writin for the horns to play that high. You want to go into the industry for scoring films, right? You'll probably have your score recorded by a live orchestra. If you gave this music to a live hornist you wouldn't have anything left on your body from the shoulders up. Never write that high for horns unless you are writing for a virtusoso. Never. Mind you, we start getting "iffy" around the concert B natural in the MIDDLE of the stave, anything above THAT needs some consideration. I would even consider taking the horns down an octave in measure 5 through 8, they tend to be more powerful and present a little lower. That one's is optional though, it doesn't go insanely high, you can still leave it. But please address measure 62 and after.
Measure 28, that E-natural in question: I like it, but it's too weak, I think you should have a lot more instruments just come in for that measure and play out that C major chord, I think it needs more attention than what it already has.
I really do like the choice of meter, I can't wait to hear the whole thing either.
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