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Your label of A minor is wrong - that's an F in second inversion.
You have 4ths between bass and alto in several places.
The piece *does* lack a well-crafted progression. You have too many minor chords in a row, and you basically go about in a circle.
I would have made the second chord a C in first inversion (if using your bass). Double the E to avoid having a 4th between bass and alto. When writing for 3 voices, you can double or have octaves of notes, but rarely.
Anyway, you must decide for yourself how the progression goes, but you have too many weak chord progressions in a row.(not to mention parallel 4ths)
I'll get back to you.
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