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Old Jul 9 2007, 3:34 PM
JazzyKendall JazzyKendall is offline

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Nice stuff. the relentless eight-note diddy is fine with the way you work it harmonically. the biggest problem I have with this piece is measure 16. In measures 14-15 you bring in the first moment of imitation between the trumpet and the piano, which is great, its a momentum builder for measure 17, but for some reason it just dies in measure 16. there is no rhythmic push into measures 17-18 which just suddenly pick up in the piano. I think if you clear up that one measure it'll help this piece tremendously. the only other minor issue I had with this piece were the ornaments in the trumpet in measures 6 and 12, they just seemed to be a little too much. Good job overall, keep at it.
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