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Thanks for taking the time to comment guys! It really helps me to get a fresh perspective on this piece because we each hear music in our own unique ways. About the ornaments, I think they seem a bit overburdened in the midi rendition; when I play them on my trumpet I don't think they obstruct so much, they somewhat flow rather freely from the instrument. I simply tried to embellish the line a little so that the piece may be musical but a bit virtuosic at the same time.
About m. 16; I purposely held back here a little bit in order to make the motion into m. 19 more of a climax. I was trying to construct a series of smaller climaxes that would gradually build into the big moment of the piece, which Tumababa pointed out in m. 30. At m. 30, I do like my VI chord with a dissonant 7, but I completely agree that it sucks to have the piano get softer into that measure. Surely I need to have the piano crescendo into it, as does the trumpet. I hope this solves the problem you had with it.
I was also curious about the ending, does it seem too stale with the eighth notes after all the activity of the middle section? I almost feel like we need a quieter, unwinding section of some length in the piano to balance the prior activity. What do you think?
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