The Nightfly

I am very sorry for the long delay. But this was due to the fact that I had no internet connection the past week and also I was in the middle of some important stuff. But anyway, hope you forgive me for that and lets get back to our leson.

Your materials are good. I think you mis understand me from somewhere because I never said you did something incorrectly I just wanted you to work on limited number of motives at first. Of course I don't ask you to erase your materials.

Here is what I think about the progress so far: I do not want to interfere with your melodies so I will only speak of what could have been done to improve them. First of all the rhythmic aspect is very unvaried and predictable at some parts. For example the ascending triplet figure, you know how it will end at the moment it starts.. You get my point ? Also the persistent 16th notes starting at measure 9. I know that this stage is too early to get into such detail but I am just telling you what I think as we progress, it might help you later on. I would suggest you to be more inventive with your rhythmic patterns to avoid predictability which sometimes is the reason to be a piece to be boring.

On the second page however, you used 8th notes and quarters. why? why the sudden change in pace? Or did you make it like this as a working draft of your motives. Or do you intend to crate a contrasting character with these ?

Ok see, now you got plenty of material to start writing your piece. Now you know for which instrument you are writing for and you got plenty of themes to work with. Have you decided on the form or the length perhaps? I assume this will be a pretty fast piece so it might be only 2 minutes or so. Perfect for our first assignment, so we can quickly finish this up to move on to another one.

For your next assignment:

Organise your materials in a fashion to represent an ABA form. You can use your main theme at the both A parts and the slow themes of the second page on the B part. Organize them and leave blank measures where you plan to crate transitions and other materials later on. This way we will have the backbone of our piece and will get the basic idea before the details get in.

if you get stuck.. just post what you have