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You've certainly done a wonderful job and I'm sure this took a lot of effort and you got quite a result. I think the main problem with the 1st movement is a lack of contrast especially within the first 100 bars. Nothing changes, you have the same mood and almost the same material for a very long time which gets a little boring. The development section is much better, you explore the material, develop it, modulate much more and the music seems more interesting. I think that instead of modulating to G minor for your "second subject" I would move to Eb major, C major or Ab major and come up with a contrasting section that relaxes the rhapsodic material that precedes it.
The third movement seems a little strange to me - you start in G major and go through a couple different keys to end in c minor? I think you want a triumphant ending, the music sounds joyous. So my two suggestions are: beginning the movement in c minor ending in C major or Eb or something or adding in a third movement (most likely in c minor or g minor) and attaca-ing into the fourth movement and then possibly ending in c minor. It's not weird that you end in a minor key, look at Brahms' rhapsody from Op. 119 (it begins in Eb and ends in eb minor), but it has to have context. I think a scherzo or a lively movement preceding the finale would be beneficial.
In any case, you display a strong understanding of chamber writing, your music is musical and this is a strong piece of music. I've always thought that writing chamber music with the piano is next to impossible - the piano doesn't really mesh well in chamber music, at least I thought, but yours seems to work quite well. Usually what happens is the piano just plays passage work and sometimes plays the theme (although Mendelssohn's Piano trio in d minor is fantastic). Still, good job and get to work on your next piece!
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