rob1984

Now I've got my MIDI working I can post my opinion as promised:

Firstly, for a first composition that really is great! I don't know how old you are but I know my first compositions just consisted of a melody with no harmony. So well done, whatever criticism you get about it, don't forget this because it is a fantastic effort for a first piece.

The left hand can become a little repetitive but it doesn't bother me that much. There are other things which I'd look at first:

What software do you use to compose? I tell you why I ask; this piece could really do with some detailed dynamics. By this I mean the smallest details, such as changing the velocity of the first note in each bar so it's slightly stronger than the rest perhaps.

I don't know if you were thinking this as you wrote it but I think it'd sound good with a lilted feeling (where you can really feel the emphasis on the first and third beats of each bar) and to this end, I also think the whole thing would sound better at a slightly faster tempo. I was fiddling around with it in Sonar and increasing all your tempos by just 10bmp makes a huge difference.

Also, to humanise it further, I'd suggest adding small tempo changes throughout. It's a very mechanical piece and this could make a difference; it might even add to the dance-like lilting effect I'd like to hear introduced into the piece!

Finally, I don't know if it's my sounds, but the left hand drowns out the melody at times. It needs to be more in the background than it currently is; just a light accompaniment on which the melody can float.

I hope all that doesn't sound too critical. For a first effort this really is very good. Keep composing!