Nice work! Your score needs a
lot of attention. My first advice would be to drop the key signatures altogether, OR spend a good deal of time improving the readability of the score.
Some of the passages are made to look ten times harder than they actually are because you used an ass-backward voicing. For example: m.146-147 in the Clarinet, you have arpeggiated eighth notes E, Ab, B, E, Ab, E, B, Ab... basically an Emajor arpeggio. Why did you use Ab instead of G#? Because it's in the key signature? If you're going to go outside a key like that,
keep the entire "outside" part in the "outside" key signature.
Another example: m.143-145 piano. The chords are spelled very obtusely. G, Cb, D - why not just write the Gmajor chord... G B D??? G C Fb - why not a Cmajor chord G C E? The inverted D major chord spelled as Gb A D?? Your misspellings make this very difficult to read. Another example: m.27 bassoon. F# Db Bb Db F# Bb F# Bb. It's obviously a Gb major arpeggio... why mix flats and sharps and confuse the bassoonist while also visually concealing the underlying harmony? Use Gb.
There are a ton of (what I consider to be) errors like this throughout the score. You definitely need to fix that aspect of the piece. The misspellings are maddening.
The clarinet part is completely playable (except the
glissandi) and is not particularly difficult to
play though it's very difficult to read. Be advised that
downward glissandi are not playable (theoretically, maybe, practically, no.). If you're wanting a measured
glissando, write out the notes and rhythm. A "smear"
glissando will not work in this instance. Smears are only effective moving upward on the clarinet, and above the break (i.e., written B-natural above middle C).
Some notational issues (not including collisions, etc. in the score):
1. Don't use dotted rests in duple time. Only appropriate in treble time.
2. Don't beam three eighth notes together unless they are triplets. (personal opinion)
3. Don't use mordents or
gruppetti, just write the damn notes out. Trust me, it saves rehearsal and practice time and is less confusing.
Again, I like the piece, but you have some work to do before you should consider it finished. Please take this constructive criticism in the light in which it was given.
Great job!
