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Is it just me or does anybody else think we're starting to lose the focus here?
There's a few bits that need thought through a little more I think. Do we all agree that the middle section/development begins at (according to the most recent MIDI) 1:46? That's where the tempo picks up a little (I need to kick it down a notch, though), so it's an obvious 'development' in the piece so far.
The way this has been turning out, the first problem I notice is at 2:16... it just seems like it's starting to go off tangent and we didn't do too much afterwards to make it fit. Also, the harmony at 2:23 in my opinion just plain needs reworked, provided we keep it, it just doesn't fit the rest of the piece. At 2:30, everything just seems weak... it's kinda droning on, and I know no idea how we could fix it. We tried to bring back an idea from earlier in the piece, but for some reason, I don't think it worked very well. The return to the slower tempo with the main theme was also a little iffy, I think we need to find a better way to accomplish that.
I think we need to get rid of all of that.... we need to find a better way to bridge from 2:16 to like ... 2:38 ..... all that stuff in between seems like a mess to me. Does anybody else agree with me?
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