OK, I understand where you were going with it, however, know that while you may have though of the middle part as the "main melody", because you have more than one instrument on the upper part, and you have two instruments in very strong registers up there (flute and clarinet) THEY are what will come across as the "main melody".
If you want to use the mid-range as your principle focus, then you have to give the mid-range as much of your attention as possible, and REALLY give the upper range as little.
I see, I didn't consider that the low flute was in a weak register. Would something as simple as bringing the high clarinet into unsion with the flute and oboe solve this problem?
Also, don't forget to include dynamics! right now, I have no idea whether this phrase is soft or loud.
I won't trouble you with all my questions about this, but do you know of any good resources where I could learn about this kind of thing? I am not musically educated and am lacking familiarity with even some of these basic things.
Thechnically, player 1 should sound identical to player 2!
Could you elaborate on this please?
To me, it would mean unison doubling them all the way, but I'm pretty sure that's not what you mean.
Cheers.
P.S. Please don't forget my exercise 4 on page 17
