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I think the second piece has got the wrong feel to it. It sounds rather bouncy and happy. You say he's in a good mood when drunk so it's fine to have an uplifting melody, but I would recommend two things: 1) Make it a slower melody (in fact, slow it down overall) and 2) try some low blasts on a french horn or trombone every other beat. This gives a piece a somewhat clumsy feel.
The piece itself is good but I don't think it fits the character. Also I'm not sure about the bit at 0:09 where everything else cuts out and you just have the melody, it seems a bit sudden and its very overt.
The first piece (Caolan's) was good, if a little short. Try adding another, slower section onto the end. Keep the feel of the piece but just try to break up the speed of it a bit. I like this one though and it certainly fits the character.
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