Okie
C.
What is really pleasent is that you are diverse.
Well done on that!
what you've shown here is just a small intro to a larger piece. I realise that YOU realise that, but it needs to be said.
Giving you straight suggestions on where to go, is not a good idea really. It's your piece, not mine. I would "easily" (yeah right... I've been stuck for months and months in times!) to work it for you, or advice on some detail, but it's not the best thing to do.
It is deadly slow, right?
Do you want to keep it this way? Dawn for you means sleep? It sure means darkenss, but isn't it also warmth? Calmness? Something else?
Movenemt? How about that? In the piano, or the violin.
Maybe a change of mood, totally, because all those aug. chords are getting on YOUR nerve (I'm fine with them!
) There is absolutely no rule that you need to be coherent to the harmonic language you use forever. You started with this type of chors, but your violin is playing something. This makes an impact to the brain and ears to the audience. You have every excuse to take the melody and make it into harmony. If it works for your ears, it shall work for the examiner as well.
Nikolas
PS. I would advice to attempt to transcribe the sibelius files to pdf. It's much easier for everyone, although I've managed to install schorch finally (only on IE, not firefox... hehe)