I don't have much to say about the
craft of this - it's just out of my sphere of expertise.
But, I will say that it's quite pretty - very lyrical/melodic and could be devastating in the hands of passionate performers. There's beautiful stuff here, and I think it will work well as part of a larger work. From this point (i.e. the end of 'Dawn') you can easily take it ANY number of places; to develop and expand your idea.
I look forward to the next installments.
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Thanks for sharing, hope you get it printed/bound in time!
