Ron,
I was listening to this piece and studying the score. ( I won't comment on the appearance of the score
). There is a lot of quality material in this composition. There is significant reverb which contributes to the eerie mood.
The piece is fairly complex with a harmony that isn't simple and the rhythm is often intricate with triplets and dotted rhythms. It seemed to me that the ideas were flying by very quickly which makes it hard for the listener to grasp what is going on. Well, this works well for background music on a thriller/horror movie where something is "out there" but can't quite be made out clearly. On the other hand, the musical ideas could be presented more slowly.
I took the liberty of expanding the ideas in your first two bars into ten bars - this illustrates what I mean by slowing down the pace. You may hate my "perversion" of your piece but I thought I would make this suggestion.
Herb
The mp3 is
here