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Gorgeous, Mike! really nice.
A few small comments to make, but basically I enjoyed it very much!
Bar 36 - the f# in the violin would be better as a gb because you had used a gb previously, and it matches the harmony etc. in the piano. (Similarly, perhaps some of the sharps in the 'cello there should be flats?)
Bar 39 - no need for that E# in the violin there, really.
From around bar 57 to 60, I felt you could have made more of that climax. At present, it is a beautiful swell in intensity, but I feel it may be the main climax of the movement, so maybe a little more would help. Just a thought.
Some of the bow markings are not strictly necessary. (e.g., b.57-58, 'cello)
Really nice job though... I very much enjoy the big steps you're taking with your harmonic languages, and you've made it very convincing!
Also, I'm envious of the damn fine GPO rendering! You did a good job there too!
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