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Ok I got back quicker than I thought.
Before I go through and do a little nit-picking, i must say overall its a very nice piece, nice melody and a nice balance between the voice and piano. And I feel like the piano part is so together a lot. Maybe try seperating it, it will lighten it up a little bit. Just a thought.
Now, a few things. For me, the piece is just to happy for text. The text has this dark quality that i would have brought out more. Just something to think about.
At mes. 9-10 check your dashes, it should be for-get him no for_get-him
At mes. 25 tell should not be noted as te-ell it should just be tell__ with a slur over the notes you want teel to be under. Same with laging at 29.
Overall very nice. Great Job.
scott.
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