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Thank you for the review. It's much appreciated and all your comments have been considered. I do have validation for much of your complaint.
I don't see the weird chord on m 16. Did you mean the D flat at the begining of the triplet? The F in m 7 is a passing tone resolving to the E.
I took out the harmony in m 2 for contrast. I repeat essentially the phrase twice without any variation, so I decided to thin the harmony on the first phrase and on the repeat I added more harmony. It might not be as effective as I thought.
Sorry about it looping a bunch. I don't know how to take that off.
I don't want to make it seem like I'm disregarding your post. I'm going back through and looking at those places to see if it they are as effective as I thought.
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