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First of all, the strings don't sound too smooth. Those part where you change chords, you can hear a slight "cut" in the music. I can give you suggestions on what is missing: bass. Note that you don't have any low bassy sounds in this piece. You could try adding some pizzicatos playing quietly. Don't know how will that work out, just give it a try. Right now, most of your notes are in the mid~high range.
Next, there's a light bug at 3:18. The music cuts off for no reason. I don't think that's intentional, is it? I enjoyed the piano solo that comes before that, it was nice.
That's my 2 cents for now. I'll give more comment once you finish the piece.
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A: People wonder why we ugrlug tribesmen don't like your music. Here's why: tone, tone, tone, repeat ad infinitum. No barking whatsoever. Boooooooring.
B: Clearly you've never heard Who Let the Dogs Out
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