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Old Mar 13 2008, 12:30 AM
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can I make a minor comment?

it's a very minor thing, but some editors really HATE seeing it...

Score indications should be all in the same language.

the tempo is in french

the mute expression is in italian

the divisi is in english

hehehe, choose one!

you can use all italian if you want, leaving the Debussy french indications where they are.

half = la meta
all = tutti

about the orchestration, a very quck glance through shows nothing that really pops out at me... though I'd have suggested replacing those harmonic pizzes in the celli at the end with (if you want, harmonics) harp.

I think it would render more clearly the actual texture that the original has at the piano.
actually, I think some sustained note on the attack of each of those notes would be necessary... they aren't realy played "staccato" at teh piano. the pedal holds them, delicately.


maybe even harp doubled with celesta or glock.

At measure 24, and again at 33, those lovely parallel chords, I'd have suggested using your horns with the bassoons, instead of only bsn and clarinet.
horns make a lovely blend with bassoons.

Speaking of measure 33, I think a richer sound for the melody is warranted... how about doubling the alto flute with the english horn? or with a clarinet, or even clarinets in octaves...

measure 35, in the flute part, always include rests for the "silent" 2nd flute if it will be coming in within that same measure. that means placing flute one in layer 1, and flute 2 in layer 2.

my one dissappointment with the orchestration is the slightly overly-clichéd use of almost only flute to play the melody.

sorry if I'm working backwards...

at measure 21, I don't like the unison flutes. I think octaves would work better.

my impression is that you were afraid of running out of instruments for the accompaniment.. and ended up leaving the melody too sparse.

still, an excellent orchestration despite my bitching and whining.
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