... a week later ... no replies? Anyhow, looks OK to me. I caught a look of concern on one of the ballerinas' faces: third beat of bar 6. Should she have eaten that chicken that'd been sitting in the fridge ... or am I imagining things?
Nevertheless, all is well again by bar 7.
Greetings from sunny Sydney. Watching the progress ... after I nick down to Coogee Beach for a late lunch!