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A couple of rather nice bits, actually.
When something new comes in, you must prepare it. You must prepare changes into what seems 3/4 time. You must prepare that leap way up to the Db.
You seem to be thinking too locally with the harmony. Perhaps each beat works, but each chord doesn't flow into the next one the way it should. Play the progressions at a piano - make sure you're writing a satisfactory progression. Albeit it's hard to do so with this melody, but I think it can be done.
Just go over your harmony again with a fine tooth-comb, and fix anything that even sounds 'not quite as good as it could be' to your own ears. I don't want any 'this will have to do' in here.
Btw, you are still causing the music to trip up on occasion by mixing metres/rhythms. Just be careful.
(good work though - I just want you to polish it before you do any work with it)
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