nino, this is a really nice phrase sequence..
i really like the movement of the lines and how you keep them close, it is almost like counterpoint... I have no problems with anything.. im just going to point out that you have some kind of parallel 4ths between the second beat of the 3rd measure, and the first beat of the 4th measure... if it was intentional then its ok.. remember, in jazz there are no "rules"... in classical music this would be a little rare... but we are doing jazz..
at the A7 sus, you never added a G in the whole phrase which could have given a little more tension, specially if you have a sus resolving to the third, is the perfect moment to add some more tension and resolve the next bar.. the thing with dominant chords is that you really want them to create tension... we will talk in the next lesson about this... how important dominant chords are and how they can trick the human ear...
great job!...
and yes... the question you asked, you also answered yourself.
