Dan, some really good things. My only beef is with the score: dynamic markings for voice should actually be placed above the staff simply for the reason that it doesn't interfere with the lyrics. For ease of singing, it would also be better to slur the notes during melismatic passages, too. The ending also seems a bit sudden: was that intended? I'm wondering if adding a ritardando would be more effective there, or perhaps lengthening that portion a bit.
Other than that, it's a great piece. Thanks for sharing.
