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the sort of thing you did in the penultimate measure (the last measure before your final chord) of this piece is the sort of counterpoint/harmony error I've noticed you do awful lot of.
You have on the last beat of the penultimate measure the bass part going:
A - G - F - C --- to the final D
What is the harmony on that last beat?
It seems to imply D minor 2nd inversion.
But you pop in a C natural? why?
Besides, why have a D minor chord as the chord leading into a... D minor chord??? Why not an actual cadential chord? A7 maybe?
How do you justify the C# rubbing at the same time as the C natural?
Even if we ONLY look at the cello and flute parts: how do you justify F against C#? what chord is that supposed to be? Would that TRULY be a cadential chord?
The D minor implication you have in that last chord of that measure is the sort of harmonic appogiatura I was talking about earlier. You do a lot of that. It's bad, m'kay? Don't do that.
You really need to be doing some straight-forward counterpoint and harmony exercises. (particularly before arguing against John Cage)
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