This is a seriously respectable piece. I'm not sure where to place it inside my mind in terms of music history...Not contemporary, too familiar sounding for that. But...not exactly the kind of level of musical comprehension expected from a 24-year-old. If you can write this now (meaning that you already have the stamina for large-scale works)...i can't see why you shouldn't soon find your own voice and perhaps write something very original. The amount of talent that this requires...is way above average.
You said somewhere that the contemporary music doesn't express you very well. So i thought perhaps i should tell you this wisdom (from a very wise girl): key to success is not making new things...but old things in a new way. That simple sentence explained everything to me...also why the contemporary music is frowned upon
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When i begin to study orchestral music i will definitely return to see your style of orchestration as i will probably learn quite a bit from it.
Good luck!!!