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Originally Posted by Jamie Whitmarsh
Okay, just so you know, the First movement wont' p lay.
Second movement: Your bassoonist is probalby going to want to breath in these first few bars somewhere. I would also suggest putting a breath mark or a grand pause or something before the tempo change, so everyone breathes together. I would also recommend putting in a lot of slurs and some more articulations. If you don't, they will tongue EVERYTHING. Unless that's the sound you want
Third Movement: This one has better development, I feel. Also, more articulations, that's nice. It would be beneficial probably to have starting and ending dynamics for your crescendos. I think there could be more dynamic specification overall probably.
Fourth Movement: Those are some fast notes for the Bassoon and the Horn. I'm not sure if they're impractical or not; have you checked this piece with a performer of each instrument? When the Flute, Oboe, and Clarinet are playing in 45, it might be hard to get that totally in tune. I would think about the passage from 59 to 71. Do you need everyone playing eighth notes all the time? It might be better and less tiring for the players to stagger those parts.
Just some things to consider.
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The 2nd movement I was considering moving the held notes around to give the bassoonist a break and also changing colors too. The articulations I wasn't really thinking about at the time, thanks for saying that. I'll add in what I wanted in there. The third movement does need more dynamics, I agree with you 100%. The fourth movement, the bassoon line is possible for the bassoonist I wrote it for, I've heard her rip Ligeti's ten pieces. I put the eigth notes going all the time for a more driving effect, give it a nice contrast to the other movements, as for staggering the parts on the eight notes, I completely agree again. Thanks for the comments, I always get worried when I post and nobody replies for a few days. I'm just starting off composing so I really do appreciate the suggestions. I will upload the first movement midi again once my internet is running.