Gardener
Thanks for the lengthy comment, it's always good to know what people did/did not like about my work. Regarding, the minor-third-heaviness of the piece, I thought it got a bit redundant as well. I'm orchestrating this right now for a competition due at the end of the month, and I did vary it up a bit. In fact, there is a section now where it is based in fourths, as well as the full o7 chord. Sevenths...hmm..interesting thought, I'll consider it!
As far as the voicing, I've also begun my re-writing on that. QcCowboy pointed out how to write better horizontally when I first posted, and that seems to be the consensus with the other comments as well. I have a bad habit of writing how i envision it in my mind rather then what the performer will see. The enharmonics and such, well, I suck at lol. I don't always know when to use what and where, so the examples you have pointed out I will take to heart.
Thanks again man, I appriciate you taking the time out of your day to give me your insight to help me become a better composer. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece!
Vince