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Old May 9 2008, 12:58 PM
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Okay, I listened to it.

First thing - your notation needs help. Try to read through each line individually and you'll see what I mean, particularly in divisi sections. You've got a place where you move from a B to a Cb in the same measure - unnecessary. Likewise, there's a tenor divisi that moves from a B to a split C#/Eb. It should be written C#/D#, so it's clear that it's a 6th between B and D#, and a 7th between C# and D#.

Your harmonies are nice. I disagree that they sound like they're from hell. Granted, the juxtaposition of the blessing text with the dark harmonic material is unexpected, but it's also awesome because of it. I actually really disliked the sudden shift into consonance. And the ending cadence - it seemed cliché to me. The 4-3 suspension in the tenor... I would have much rather you continued your chromatic explorations, and led them to a consonant cadence, rather than switching to consonance for the last few phrases.
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