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Looking at your age it's fine, but few things should be mentioned:
1) A motet should have sacred text (for eg. a psalm). Secular homophonic choral pieces like yours were called "madrigals" in the renaissance period (Please don't confuse it with "late medieval").
2) The key change to G minor after an imperfect cadence in E minor is very odd, but it's ok for a 20-21th cent. composition.
3) In choral pieces every ornamentation must be written out (soprano voice, bar 3).
4) The music should be composed for the text, and not in the reverse direction.
5) The rhythm is very odd, and there is no sense of direction. I suggest you to sing each melody-line and you will see why they sound bad.
máté
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