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Vince -
Some excellent work there. Like others have said the articulations and rhythmic counterpoint was a treat. I do wish the second movement were expanded and the the third a bit more succinct. I would encourage you to go back to it after a rest. When you do I suggest strongly one notational change (aside from the ones suggested already)-
Halve the note values for the faster sections for easier reading. For the slow section keep the note values but make half note of fast section equal quarter note of slow section. The challenge of writing your piece is NOT get lost in the articulations and the telegraphic motives. BTW - such motivic material would be excellent for a fugato serving as bridge from the slower movement to the return of the faster section.
Also, the change into a more majorish tonality was welcomed (it happened about halfway or so).
All in all though some good work. You should workshop it with a quartet --- will increase your chances of getting it performed.
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