Thanks Flint for the feedback!
I do agree with the doubled note values, im going to do this right away, in fact i dont know why i wrote it the way i did in the first place. i also agree on the obscure rhythmic patterns, i have a bad habit of writing as a composer and not writing how the performer will see it. thank you very much for your time and input, i really appriciate it! its funny because i actually learn more about writing a good score then at school lol. YC university here i come.
thanks again Flint
Vince