Thread: 1st piano piece
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Old May 17 2008, 10:07 AM
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I think it's a nice little piece. I do have some notes. The part over the two-note chords seems stagnated(from bar 9). I think altering the righthand part a bit can overcome this. Also the form is missing a bit. I think i feel this way because it ends after a new variation. If you'd add a repeating section before ending the form would be more clear. I think the first motive is nice. With some rewriting this can be good.
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