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Old May 20 2008, 9:55 AM
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Whilst overall this composition is a moderately convincing baroque pastiche, there are a couple of harmonically inappropriate moments that smudge an otherwise clever illusion. I have identified these as follows:

1) The incorrectly resolved suspension in bars 1-2
2) The incorrectly approached suspension in bars 6-7
3) Leaps after passing notes (eg. bars 1 ,3 etc.). These can be effective in some circumstances, but I feel they are strangely deployed herein.
4) In bars 14-15 the reversion to the tonic seemed slightly contrived,

The last system was great though, and your command of modality is very pleasing. I know you've been taking lessons with our resident early baroque expert, echurchill, and I concur with his belief that this a composition to be proud of. You've definitely learned a great deal since the start of that thread.

P.S. It was great to hear a real performance!
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