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Originally Posted by Zetetic
Whilst overall this composition is a moderately convincing baroque pastiche, there are a couple of harmonically inappropriate moments that smudge an otherwise clever illusion. I have identified these as follows:
1) The incorrectly resolved suspension in bars 1-2
2) The incorrectly approached suspension in bars 6-7
3) Leaps after passing notes (eg. bars 1 ,3 etc.). These can be effective in some circumstances, but I feel they are strangely deployed herein.
4) In bars 14-15 the reversion to the tonic seemed slightly contrived,
The last system was great though, and your command of modality is very pleasing. I know you've been taking lessons with our resident early baroque expert, echurchill, and I concur with his belief that this a composition to be proud of. You've definitely learned a great deal since the start of that thread.
P.S. It was great to hear a real performance!
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As I state somewhere in my original post, I wasn't intending to stick too faithfully to the Baroque style, so I'm not surprised if it doesn't sound too accurately baroque - I wasn't being as careful with my treatment of dissonance as I would've been had I wanted to emulate baroque practices.
I don't quite understand points 1 and 2, I was under the impression that suspensions needed to be tied from a previous beat, and that these appogiaturas? (not sure about the spelling there though
) If you could explain why the one in bar two is incorrectly resolved I'd be extremely grateful. As for the one in bar 7, to me that's just a 9th - not a dissonance in my book so I didn't treat it as such
Point 3 you mention leaps between passing tones, but is it a problem when the leaping is between chord tones? (Here I'm treating the minor 7th as a consonance in bar one, hence the lack of resolution)
I'm not sure what you mean by point 4, the tonic isn't touched in bars 14-15, those two bars are | i6 - - | VI - V | in the key of the dominant (B minor).
By last system do you mean the last four bars? If so I'm very pleased, as the italian 6th was a chord I've not used before, and I'm glad its use was successful in this case
I have indeed learnt an awful lot from echurchill, he has opened my ears to some extremely exciting and exotic sounds, and all of this before Bach even arrived!
Thanks very much for taking the time to listen and comment.