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I just want to say that overall it was very good.
One thing that felt odd to me was in bar 6 and again in bar 8, the half-note fermata followed by a quarter rest and quarter note. Usually when you write a choral, that would be a dotted-half fermata and the conductor would cut off and give the beat 4 that leads into the next bar. The rest would be up to the conductor.
I also felt like the final bar was a little abrupt in the chord change. It felt like there was a transition chord left out between beats 2 and 3. Maybe beat 3 could be (score order starting at the top) F,E,C,Bb and beat 4 sould be your original chord with the fermata.
There was also something that told me that there should be a minor chord in bar 8. This is achieved through flatting the sopranos D.
Overall it was really good. Everything I made a comment on is just my personal opinion and I thought it was great to start with.
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