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This was nice. Good for a half an hour's sketching anyway.
I like your harmony - quite pretty really, but at times not perfectly realized.
Bars 3 and 4 are really the only "chordal" bars in it - then you've a lot of 2-line stuff, and then some parallel stuff. I would work on more coherence. I don't want to say more homogeneity, but that's partly true - if your harmony is coherent throughout, then you can work on creating contrasts in texture, etc. etc.
Same with the rhythm - sometimes going from quavers straight into crotchets is a little jarring - see at bar 14, the quaver motion dies, and all momentum is lost. A possible solution is to put a couple of murmuring quavers in the piano - just two or three, just to suggest that quavers pulse still underneath it. I know that's not really suitable for this phrase, which works quite well, but consider keeping rhythmic transitions smooth, except for special effect.
Last thing: you put a lot of emphasis towards the end on B natural versus B flat. I suggest that this should become of some importance to the piece, otherwise your stressing it here will seem 'out of character', and won't make sense in the long run, as it'd be inconsequential.
Lots of waffle for a short piece, but I like what you have.
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