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The first two measures - To me, it sounds like I want to hear the second note re articulated, either softer or louder (my instincts say louder, perhaps followed by a diminuendo) rather than just sitting on the fifths.
Also, the 'drone' part is a little boring. Perhaps consider tying some or all notes, or maybe a combination, to where it's not just 'ever 4 beats everyone re-attacks' These suggestions don't have to be followed at all, these are just my thoughts. Often I just comment on what I would have done.
It sounds somewhat film score-esque, with the harmonic progression and the orchestration.
I find it odd that in meausre 23 you have Vln II higher than Vln I, but in no way does this really impact the piece.
I feel that the ending could have benefited from some pizzicato.
These are my subjective thoughts. Maybe they'll give you some ideas; maybe what you have is exactly what you want. Either way works for me. Also, I have not read previous comments, so my comments will not be influenced by them.
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