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I think you write rather well for the modern mixed chorus; it isn't hard at all to imagine your lush harmonies sung by a real chorus and sounding wonderful.
Considering how you approached it, I thought the chord at 19 might sound better in root position, with a G or a G and D divisi in the bass...just my opinion. Also, the soprano part in measures 25 and 26 puzzles me; you have two notes on the same pitch and the same syllable; are you wanting a re-articulation there? If not, it would be clearer just to write whole notes there; the alto is already doing the rhythm you want on different pitches. In any case, you may want to clarify your intentions.
Just a caution: you may want to reconsider using Frost as subject matter if you hope to get any public performance or publication of this or other such pieces. Frost's poetry is not yet in the public domain, and will not be for some time. You may know of the young American composer Eric Whitacre who is quite a hot commodity these days; well, he did a characteristically fine choral setting of Frost's "Stopping By The Woods On A Snowy Evening" and when he went to publish it was unable to secure permission to use the text from Frost's estate. He ended up having to commission a poet to write a new text that would mirror the metre and mood of the original. A friend of mine wrote a comic operetta on Dr. Seuss' "Green Eggs And Ham" and encountered the same problem. Just a word to the wise.
Very nice work.
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