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I concur with Jamie about his general comments of your piece. You start with a good idea and one that sounds like the band would have a lot of fun playing but the following sections entrance starting at 50" feel too sudden due a lack of preparation. You could easily have a transition made of you opening theme juxtaposition a portion against newer material as if the music wants to continue full speed to a premature conclusion but is interrupted by a new motive (or an alteration of the present one). You could create also a new melody with some of the the opening motive and its inversion or a chorale like section - deriving the harmony from various permutations of the melody (eg, inversion in bass, melody in tenor/alto and retrograde in top) and then alter the chords so they have a harmonic/melodic flow.
Also the ending harmonies are a bit strange - something I would hear from Granados or Albeniz but in this case it doesn't jive with what preceeded -- although I do like your idea to have the opening melody somewhat stray and migrate to in the lower voice in the end.
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