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It's very mono-rhythmic, even with the addition of the triplets, and while I understand that it will be somewhat remedied with live performance, it's still something to watch out for. I'd go back and revisit your words. You have a part where you have the tenors come in on the second syllable of "precious," which would work much better as the word "Just" - same vowel, and it makes sense with the line.
High G in the alto line? That'd require a solo-choir with opera mezzos to do. Your average choral alto will not be able to sing that blended. In fact, the whole alto line runs up pretty high. It'd be much better to add a second-soprano part, rather than pull the 1st altos up so much.
You have several moments of beautiful and surprising harmonies. However, you also have these moments where the texture thins very suddenly, with little or no relation to the text that I can see. Consider these carefully.
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