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The G in the alto as well as the high C in the soprano are both probably too high, though the latter you might be able to pull off. Also, you have some weird doublings that seem to have no purpose in spots - like in measure 38, you have the soprano split into divisi to hit a note the altos are already hitting, on the same syllable even. That seems to just be...sloppy is the word that comes to mind. Perhaps you had a purpose for that, but it is definitely not apparent.
And I just noticed the Eb above the staff in the bass - also probably too high. Try to keep all voices but alto within one ledger line above and below the staff. That's certainly not the hard-and-fast rule, but it's a decent estimate most of the time.
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