Originally Posted by Dev

I'll start with the overall and the positive:

Nicely written/harmonized throughout, and you seem to have a knack for matching musical ideas with the ideas/mood of the poem, such as having "joy" be on a major chord after a piece written in minor, or having "mon-ot-on-ous" be the same chord repeated over and over. Well done in that area.

However there are a bunch of mistakes that seem to muddle up the score:

Measure 7: The bass and tenor do not need a tied note since they are changing syllables. Change that to two separate notes. Besides, if it were tied, wouldn't it be a half note? Precisely.
Measure 14: The way you've written "moon" is confusing as crap. "Moon" is monosyllabic, thus, just write the whole word under the first note, and have the underscore type line stretch under the others (like you do in measure 24 for the word "I") and put a slur under those notes - trust me, the choir will by default hold the vowel sound, not the "n" sound.
Measure 21: In the alto, you wrote "he tune" instead of "her tune"
Measure 22: It's odd and not advisable to have voices say only the latter half of a word, like "yond" here. Somehow you need to have the whole of "be-yond" or pick another part of the phrase for those voices to start on.
Measure 30: again, "heart" is monosyllabic, so don't split it up, unless of course you really want the altos to say "he art"
Measure 32: Same thing with "in"
Measure 33: Same thing with "vain"
Measure 41: Again, no need to tie the notes since they're different syllables.
Measure 46: Same thing with "hands"
Measure 47: Same thing with "at"

So yeah - basically the score just needs a lot of work, but the musical ideas are all fine.