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I would have liked to hear/see a little more variation in the pulse and tempo.
You have this wonderful section with the repeated B in the first-violin - mm. 86 - 98 - but even that, because of the homogeneity of the string sound, needs some cleaning. Consider inserting some silence so that the B repetition comes out as an uneven pulse, rather than as this repeated pedal tone. Either that, or bring all the instruments to the B at some points, to create a double-layer effect with both B-pedal and B-pulse.
Your experience in choral writing is evident in this piece, but unfortunately, I don't see very much that could not be accomplished by voices, outside of the ranges and occasional double-stops. Strings are wonderfully versatile instruments, and I would play around with using some techniques that can only be achieved by them.
I would also be wary of that opening section. The way it's built, it sounds like the Theme and First variation of a set. Perhaps develop the opening theme in the second repetition a little more - add some early development before the actual development to emphasize that no, we're not going to be hearing this melody for the next 8 pages.
You've got a really good foundation to this piece, and quite a nice frame. I think it needs just a little bit of detail-work to make it really shine.
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