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by the way, I suspect that at measure 12 you mean that with every "petal" she's more beautiful?
measure 37, I'd have suggested making a melisma on the "flow..." part then adding the "-er" as the very final note. The syllable "-er" is a very ugly sound in English, and is also terribly difficult to sing out.
and a quicky correction, "lovely" is only 2 syllables (measure 40). (actually, correct it at measure 24 as well)
that piano left hand part at measure 41 seems a tad of a stretch. it won't be played without some rolling of the chord.
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