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Nikolas,
This is pretty neat! I like all of it until about halfway. It's neat that you have all that texture at the beginning that really gives me the sense that I am going somewhere, but I think that in order to really captivate your audience, it would be neat to hint at your melody early on, either by using a variation or just echoes of it. Basically, as others have said, it isn't [quite] melodic [enough].
I'm not quite sure about the interlude you have in the middle. Musically it's all right, but it doesn't seem that there is anything like that in the middle of the description. I would have probably put that section at the beginning, and left most of the middle to the development that you have.
I also have to agree that it doesn't feel like a very long trip up the mountain... I felt it more like a trip to the snow peak. I think another (at least) thirty seconds could benefit the effect of the piece.
Overall, it's quite good. As a standalone piece I like it a lot. I do find that when you put it with the description, it's not quite as shiny, however. No doubt it's good, but that's how I feel.
By all means, keep it up!
Alan
I like this one a lot.
Honestly, I didn't even know there was a choir until my second time listening through. I think they should be louder, especially since when you can hear them they are really beautiful.
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