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The intro is interesting, but it is kind of poppish, possibly because you didn't use the harmonic minor in that part. At :31, there is no need to have sudden bass skips. I do applaud your use of chords, though. It was logical and interesting in most places.
In piano writing, there are rarely repeated notes to that degree, so the piece would benefit from less of that. I also applaud your use of the motif which you use frequently and develop it.
A complaint: I don't think you should have such long breaks at the end of each phrase. It is true that the arrival note is longer than the others, but not to such an extent. Try to create immediate movement after landing on the arrival note.
You have a lot of great ideas, but make sure that you don't have intense energy bursts followed quickly by large amounts of stasis.
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Favorite composers: Beethoven, Bruch, Mendelssohn, Bach, Schumann
Playable instruments: Saxophones, Violin, Clarinet, Piano
Favorite pieces: F.M-B.:String Quartet in A minor ------------------------------------ 
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