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Old Jun 10 2008, 2:36 AM
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I don't know - the general "exposition" I think is what needed help. It seemed trivial - I think because I'm seeing it from the point of character - WHY is the person in Sienna, and why do we care?

Maybe also the section in 6/8. It started feeling very "square."
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