Jubilee

I don't think you are a raconteur in any fashion, but I am intrigued.

Here's my opinion:

I find your first verse bulky. It may or may not work, I am not a person to say so or not, but reading it sounds bulky and when I try to sing it, I make it sound awkward.

I don't infer the same statement Drpangloss does. I did not assume that the first verse implied the person did not love you back, just the person did not know you loved them. Yet, the phrase, "the passion you give me" confuses me a lot. The following line "why I love you" seems out of place after the 2nd line.

Also, did you mean what a MESS that would be? Instead of miss?

The third verse gives me some problems. Prior to its existence, you speak in present tense, but you then switch to past. It leads to confusion because if you follow my view of your writing, to me, it means they do not know how much you love them but they kissed you anyway or if you follow DrPangloss', they don't love you back but they kissed you anyway.

However you choose to view it, the last verse makes no sense. I suggest you rewrite it to work with the context or switch the above verses to present.