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Old Jun 16 2008, 3:38 PM
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I think you need to cut down on the orchestra hits towards the end, it gets tiring after awhile.

I suggest you look at a few of the guitar riffs and derive a soothing sort of melody out of it. Then maybe back the melody with a piano playing some of the string figures you've got going and then build back up from there. The piece seems to be relentlessly pumping on all eight cylinders; find a way to bring it down dynamically. (the ending feels like a good transitioning point)

Let the piece breathe a little.
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